Budget: 2000 UAH Deadline: 10 days
Hello, Stas!
I know how to make your text a powerful tool for selling services.
What is fundamentally wrong:
1. The text is written as an article, without breaking it into blocks; it needs to be significantly shortened, leaving only powerful meaningful bullets. Everything should be formatted in a Google Doc as a static prototype; such text cannot be handed over to a designer.
2. It is unclear what the advantage of a hypnocoach is, as such. There is the word "hypnocoach," but then it just lists fears and problems, as if it were an ordinary psychologist.
3. It is unclear why it is mentioned that they are also a numerologist. If this provides some fantastic effect within the service, this point needs to be proven. The word "numerologist" alone will not make anyone faint with admiration.
4. The advantages of the LIFT methodology are not revealed.
5. The target audience is very broad; it includes motivation, increased income, and the resolution of psychological problems. About 90% of texts on the internet about mediocre services from psychologists and various coaches are written this way. You need a powerful differentiation from competitors in a format that makes the person understand, "Wow, all this time, it turns out I needed a hypnocoach."
This text cannot be rewritten on the fly and cannot be taken with a standard brief. A comprehensive study of the issue is needed; a call with an expert is highly desirable, which I insist on. Only then can we talk about some reasonable textual results.
I suggest we start everything from scratch and do it right so that you don't waste money on further promotion of these weak meanings. It would be good if you come across a designer who honestly refuses to promote these texts. But what if they don't think it's necessary to say? They might just quietly design this mess and move on. This way, you can waste your budget on layout and advertising.
In general, a seemingly weak text can cause a lot of trouble. Message me if you want to be confident about the result from the first try. I will write the best text on hypnocoaching that exists in the Russian-speaking internet for you, with a guarantee, unlimited revisions without a time limit, at any stage, even after the ad launch, I can make edits, and for A/B testing, we will gather several main screens.
In general, are you ready to help me work productively on your text? Message me, I'm here)
Budget: 2000 UAH Deadline: 4 days
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1. There is no offer - that is, a bright, effective proposal at the very beginning of the text. It should engage the reader and give them a clear understanding that their request can be satisfied here.
2. The text is written without analyzing the target audience. That is, the description of both the problems and their solutions is extremely abstract. Because of this, the services have a "cheap" appearance and it seems that you are chasing after any clients, which is a sign of low qualification. It's great when you describe 2-3 clear segments with distinct, recognizable pains. This creates a sense of recognition and clarity, and the client wants to learn more.
3. The information about yourself is written dryly; the client does not know what kind of training it is. The client is interested in how this will affect the results.
4. The psychology of reading the text is not taken into account. That is, the text is simply chopped into pieces, and there is no chain of argumentation following the scheme "interest - trust - action" at all.
5. The results are described dryly; they do not "touch" the client.
6. There is no call to action.
7. The uniqueness of the author is not revealed at all. Behind the page, there could be either a specialist of Jung's level or a graduate of a 3-week online training without experience. There is no sense of authority or an interesting personality that one would want to trust.
If desired, I can send my texts specifically about hypnosis, even in Russian (I wrote for a Pole).
What can I offer?
1. To review your file with comments.
2. To conduct a short interview to better understand the personality, clarify the goals of the text, and the target audience.
3. To edit or rewrite the text to meet your needs.
Budget: 550 UAH Deadline: 1 day
Good day!
I would be happy to take on your proposal!
Here’s what I would change in your text:
• Make it more intriguing (I would explain, add some interesting detail to create a desire to read further)
• Add more real examples of why your services are needed (maybe even something funny, but not too much to not disrupt the concept)
• Make the text more concise (remove unnecessary "water")
• Possibly formatting (if you need a file, not just text, I am ready to make it more presentable)
• Structure, meaning each point will complement the other
I look forward to your response!
Budget: 1300 UAH Deadline: 3 days
Stas, greetings. I have experience in a similar field, I have been writing texts for landing pages for 6 years. I will edit your text, making it:
-more concise;
-persuasive;
-improving the structure;
-adding a call to action.
Message me privately - we will discuss the details.
Sincerely, Marina.
Budget: 2000 UAH Deadline: 3 days
Hello, I am ready to take on the work!
I have been working as an editor and copywriter for over 8 years, and I have experience in your niche. I have many successful cases of creating texts for websites and landing pages.
Regarding your text: currently, it lacks a clear structure (it looks like just a collection of any possible information on the topic), there is a lot of fluff and information that is duplicated in different parts of the text, some phrases and pieces of sentences are not properly aligned with each other, there is a lack of interesting calls to action, and (in my opinion) the overall tone of the text is a bit harsh.
Write to me, and we will discuss all the details and wishes in more detail!
Budget: 2500 UAH Deadline: 3 days
Stas, good day. I have already worked with such topics. Here’s what is wrong now:
- too much fluff in the text;
- lacks a clear structure and has a lot of fluff;
- lacks conciseness in the formulation when addressing you;
- generally lacks triggers (why it is necessary to sign up for a consultation with you right now);
- there are no calls to action;
- will you be posting client reviews;
- lacks numbers (how many years you have been consulting, how many clients you have already made happy);
- wow effects (how exactly you improve clients' lives).
I will send an example of my work on a similar topic in private.
